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What once was perfect now is not;

Built by dreams but destroyed by thought.

The people stop and turn to fight

Against what is wrong, but once was right.

Explosions commence and the ground, it shakes;

Waking the pit full of poisonous snakes

Towers rising to high above

Fall to rubble with one great shove.

With Death at the doorstep all reason has fled

Leaving the old ideals to lie there, dead.
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AyeAye12 Mar 15, 2013  Student Writer
"The people stopt and turn to fight" should be "The people stopped and turn to fight" or " '' and turned to fight" I think.

Otherwise, feels very... dystopian. Which is kinda the point, I guess xD
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TheBlaqkRose Mar 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much for pointing that out. The extra 't' was a typo. It's supposed to be present tense.
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